Monday, July 21, 2008

On Loving Men

Struggling to write a new piece for the Lilith collection, but hey, any start is a good start, right?



On Loving Men
Note: Poem removed due to pending publication

3 comments:

Colleen said...

Still fighting with myself about punctuation. To use it? Not to use it?

Drew said...

wow. great start. I think this one works real good without punctuation...the flow sounds beautiful aloud. My suggestion would be to replace the newly mown grass bit...sounds too modern for Lilith's old-world style, you know? Otherwise, I'm liking it a lot.

Colleen said...

Thanks, Drew! I was trying to work in some of greg's suggestions to include some more contemporary references to draw in the modern reader, but I happen to agree with your take on it.